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i have written a speech myself for the speech orientation contest. is this good??? please tell me

topic ----------- MY COUNTRY INDIA


india is a country of beautiful traditions and cultures. it is very rich in culture and its tradition. It has many beautiful places such as goa,jammu and kashmir etc........ india also has one of the seven wonders of the world - taj mahal. indian people are very intelligent and hard working. india is also a very rich country. but, something is lacking in between all these things. indians are very hard working and intelligent but the only problem is the division between rich and poor. rich indians disrespect poor indians. this is one social evil. there are many social evils like that. the division between rich and poor is in many countries but the maximum division between rich and poor is in india. they treat the poor people as animals. that is very bad. that arrogance of being rich and attitude should not be there in any human being not only an indian. i dont say that all the indians are arrogant, some indians are very kind and very helping. now a days, indians have forgot about their own traditions and cultures. they have stopped following culture. now,they do not believe in the indian cultures and they want to live a care free life. everyone wants to be independent. thats good but it does'nt mean that you can completely forget about your parents. very few have patriotism and respect for india. India is land of villages. there are many villages in india. there are not enjoying that much facility as is being enjoyed by people living in the cities. in the villages, there is so much population also and most of them are illiterates. the villagers are very superstitious also. these things are a part of the social evil. and one more thing his unity. only very few people of india are united. the people of india are becoming selfish. i live in a colony and in that colony there are about 455 people. all the ladies form groups and talk. they insult each other. one says that i am punjabi and punjabis are the most intelligent people. one says i am a south indian and south indians are the best. like this they fight and form groups. recently in south, i heard some people saying, see! a south indian has achieved a oscar for india and some people in north saying, see! he has made our north india proud. this is totally wrong. you should be happy not for a south, west,east or a north indian has achieved a oscar or whatever you should be happy for an indian has made your country proud. think if in a colony itself, people are not united and then what about the country and the world. according to me, first the country should be united then the world should be united. please join hands and stand united. end this violence and bring peace to the world so that we can live peacefully.






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Wow, how old are you?
My suggestion, don't break your head over this, consult wikipedia or google.
Your Essey skills are pretty poor.
And from where did you get the "punjabi" praise from???






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India is a country of beautiful traditions and cultures. There is a long and rich history in our culture and traditions. India is most famous for its capital New Deli, however there are other wonderful cities to visit such as Goa, Jammu, and Kashmir to name a few. One of the many beautiful and historical sites that can be found here are the Taj Mahal, also considered one of the seven wonders of the world. I just edited the first paragraph but this should help you edit the rest of your paper.